Story:must read OK here goes another story.... "Honey get ready for school!" mrs.handerson said "but im tired and i hate school" replyed nick "c'mon you'll be late!" shouted mrs.handerson nick replyed "ohhh-kkkaaay then geez!" as nick got up he saw his room was just about interly empty apart from his $500 tv and his bed "Hey Mum!! whats the deal with my room ay!" nick shouted angrely "What do you mean honney??" mrs.handerson said "my room its like...empty!" nick said "let me see" said mrs.handerson as she walked into nicks room she just about fainted "w-w-whhaaaa???" she said "yer i know" nick said........"we've been burgled" mrs.handerson said sadly. * As mrs.handerson and nick walked into the police station they saw all of nicks goods "hey mr officer"nick said "whats the deal with my stuff eh?" "oh young lad you did get burgled buy we cuaght him thanks to you burgler alarm" the police man said "here young lad ave this" the police man pulled a fat white envolope from his right pocket "ere ave this" he handed it over nick opened it and a smile was on his face straight away "WOW $1000 thanks!!" nick said. * It was time for nick to leave home and find him self his own place with $17,700 he was sure he could. to be continued.....
Yes nick did find a place it was a little house with a small kitchen a small living room and a toilet and a medium dineing room and of corse a bedroom. All nick could afford was a nice sofa a crummy bed (for now) a cheap fridge and a table a chair and a lil cheap radio and a small telephone "Ahhh home sweet home" said nick,nick also just remember his mum was gonna come over in her car and drop his tv off(he sold his old bed) his mum finaly turned up with his tv "Hey nick" she said as she got the tv out of the back of the car "let me take that mum you better get home to since you were late your also late for you computing corse" said nick "ahhh i also got you a gift at the sim bux for you thats why im late" then nick saw a monitor "is that a computer?" "yes love" his mum said "thanks!!" nick said "it even comes with a desk" his mum said. to be continued
Good start! I like that his mom was being so helpful! I wonder what life will bring for Nick. Just a hint for you if you want some constructive criticism. Type your story in Microsoft Word or another word processing program. Then do the spell/grammer check before. Then just copy the text and paste in here. Not only will more people want to read it because it's easier to read that way, but it saves you from ever being timed out on the website in case it takes to long to type a post. Hope that helps! Keep writing!
I like Nick, Simsyth. And I like his Mom. I hope you don't get bored with Nick's story but if you do, just do other stuff for awhile and think about it for another day. We all here get bored sometimes with our sims. Then we visit them again and add more to their life. I just wanted you to know I'll still read your next chapter even if it takes you a week to write it because Nick is interesting. My story was almost off the bottom of this page before I got back to playing the game and added more chapters.
Nick set his new computer up "ahhh" said nick "its wonderfull" he went on to email and emailed his mum this was the messege Dear Mum From:You careing son nick Hey Mum, thanks for the new computer I love it im also thinking about getting me a job so bring in extra cash ive only got $124 left so i really gotta get a job. Thanks Mum. nick signed off. brrrriiiinnnnng brrrriiiinnnnggg "Arggg stupid phone" nick said as he picked up this is what he heard Hi its sim city police here we have some bad news about your mother "what is it?" nick said well we found her in her car the bad thing was the car was in a tree and well....sadly she had no pulse sorry kid. then the officer hung up. nick started to ball his eyes out "Why Mum why she was so nice why does it have to be her!!!" nick cryed out he got up and sobbed in his pillow. what will happen next well you'll just need to find out from the next chapter, to be continued...
